Clarence and Sophia were so angry/irritated/annoyed… Well, there are also other, more elegant, options to make your readers feel what you write.
|She inhaled sharply as she read the message.||Sharp inhale|
|He tapped his foot while the director spoke.||Foot tapping|
|“This calculation, is it right?” Clarence drummed with his fingers on the desk.||Drumming with fingers|
|“Don’t you dare!” Sophia growled at the dog.||Growling|
|Her nostrils flared and she took a step forward.||Flared nostrils|
|“Can you explain it?” Clarence glared at her.||Glare|
|He crossed his arms as the thief entered.||Crossed arms|
|“I know, I know. No need to repeat it.” Sophia rolled her eyes.||Eye rolling|
|The lawyer turned away. Clarence clenched his fists.||Clenched fist|
|“No, I’ve never said that.” Sophia smacked her lips.||Smacking|
3 thoughts on “Show vs. Tell: 10 Practical examples: Exasperation”
I’m reading a novel where the narrator is spirit, therefore incapable of feeling- it’s a brilliant story and all telling 🤭
There is no single right way to write, we all have various options to choose from 🙂 each story does well with a different approach.
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