Clarence and Sophia were so angry/irritated/annoyed… Well, there are also other, more elegant, options to make your readers feel what you write.
| She inhaled sharply as she read the message. | Sharp inhale |
| He tapped his foot while the director spoke. | Foot tapping |
| “This calculation, is it right?” Clarence drummed with his fingers on the desk. | Drumming with fingers |
| “Don’t you dare!” Sophia growled at the dog. | Growling |
| Her nostrils flared and she took a step forward. | Flared nostrils |
| “Can you explain it?” Clarence glared at her. | Glare |
| He crossed his arms as the thief entered. | Crossed arms |
| “I know, I know. No need to repeat it.” Sophia rolled her eyes. | Eye rolling |
| The lawyer turned away. Clarence clenched his fists. | Clenched fist |
| “No, I’ve never said that.” Sophia smacked her lips. | Smacking |
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I’m reading a novel where the narrator is spirit, therefore incapable of feeling- it’s a brilliant story and all telling 🤭
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There is no single right way to write, we all have various options to choose from 🙂 each story does well with a different approach.
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